Evergreen Pine // F // Transport

[rexandjazz24]

Evergreen Pine Female Sixteen (Human) Straight Forest Transport None Played by: rexandjazz24 Appearance As a brown wolf, she has vines covering her whole body and leaves. She has horns that look like a buck's and since she is a Transport wolf, she has wings, (she still is soft and fuzzy though and the wings are in her pelt) her gem is hidden under neath a bunch of leaves and vines.One of her horns are partially chipped. Evergreen Pine also has sharp sharp teeth,she has green eyes and light brown patches under her eyes. She also has a few flowers on her growing , a few birds have made her nice vine lanyards that she has around her neck. Her vines around her body look a little wild but well trimmed. Her main power is growing poisonous rose bushes around her attacker,(she can also Teleport). Her minor powers are making vines wrap around her attacker disabling them, another minor power is using a blue moon flower to make them fall asleep. Photo by Yakovlev-Vad Personality She is kind and sweet, but if anyone ever messes with her friends,family,or pack she will be the worst creature they would ever know. She likes to be outside rain nor shine and likes to make plants grow.She also likes to Teleport to different places and likes to fly around.She is very loyal , protective,happy,generous, peaceful and outgoing. She likes being alone or with wolves she really doesn't care she would be happy anyway,gets along with anyone except for enemies.She works hard and plays hard,she is funny and comical. Enjoys swimming and singing, EvergreenPine likes hiding and camouflaging into surrounding vines. She can be VERY STRONG and says what she thinks. Her shyness is her problem though she hardily speaks to anyone; she is more of a daydreamer since she just likes to Teleport from place to place. History Evergreen Pine, has been a loner since she was a pup she has just teleported from place to place until she found this place and she decided to stay.Evergreen has just stayed around Teleporting to different packs and visiting some wolves that she can manage to say a few words to.Evergreen Pine has struggles with her past she has seen horrible wars and battles where she lost her only close friend she could really talk to. Every night she wakes up trembling haunted by nightmares of that horrible day.

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[Bluecifer]

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Bluecifer // Oakspark of East

Hey, Rex!

Though Evergreen Pine sounds like a fantastic character, we won't be able to accept the application until a few things are put in order.

One; Layout -
Biographies, for both the sake of the reader and the staff, should be put into some sort of layout or template. If you haven't got a template of your own, feel free to use the default Senti has put in the sample!

Two; Pack -
Teleporters are part of their own allegiance, and do not align themselves with packs. Though one may sometimes visit a pack, few are trusted or welcome within Compass.

Three; Grammar -
I hate to be that guy, but your paragraphs have little to no breaks in them. Try not to let run-on sentences get you down and out!

Four; Mary-Sue -
Now, this is one of the most important things to address. Currently, Evergreen is what is called a Mary-Sue character; rather, she is supposedly perfect in every way and has no flaws. To avoid this, pick one character trait and amplify it. Is she primarily shy? Then her social skills won't be as good as you claim. is she a busybody? Then go right ahead with her social stigma, but keep her mean streak on the down-low. Characters who are good at everything are a bore to rp with. 


Once these are cleared up, I can't wait to rp with Evergreen! Welcome to Compass Rose!

rexandjazz24 ツ

[rexandjazz24]

I have changed the paragraphs so they are not run on , but I can't find how to get the template and Sentinel sind I should be OK as long as I delete the attachment.Evergreen struggles with her shyness and her daydreaming.She is part of her own alligence now, if you can help with the template that would be great thank you

[Sentinel]

Make sure to change the history so she's by herself and you should be good
And sorry, I had added the template for you but I'm not sure what happened when I saved it :/